Can't run the game, nothing happens when I open it.

Last Man Standing: What OS are you running?

That was not a game.

The story didn't really provide any interaction other than clicking through the text. I was confused by why there were pixels, and how them getting together again would solve the war.

What it says on the tin. I think at least a bit of interactivity would've been nice. Also the visuals could've been more interesting, they did get better towards the end though. Audio and writing worked very well and I feel the story was got conveyed well.

Interesting.

I would have liked a little more interaction even if there were some simple dialogue choices. The music suited the tone of the story really well though.

An interesting choice for entry in a game competition. Good job on creating something.

I have not read the story but .. this is not a game

The story was a bit confusing, especially with all these pixels and such; it left a lot to be explained. And yes, this is not a game. >.<

That story... was not really fleshed out as well as it could have been. While I have no issues with a text-only game design, I don't think you made the best use of Ren'Py for it - I was expecting a lot more play with text style and positioning to make use of the huge game window.

Have you considered using Twine? It's great for interactive and kinetic fiction like this.

Where's the game? Just text and music ...

I really liked the story and the mood set by the music and graphics, but I have to second what GrooveMan said: it would probably be better in Twine. I admit a bias towards Twine, but I feel a choiceless narrative like this is very much possible in Twine while not so much in Ren'Py. As is, it doesn't feel like much more than electronic non-interactive fiction. But then I am tied because I do like the story, but I would like to see it enhanced through some degree of interactivity.

More of a story than a game. Visual novels generally include some sort of decision making that affects the outcome. Story was pretty good though.

Not really a game, so I'm not really sure how to rate it since this is a game development challenge. The story wasn't particularly my thing either, sorry :/

More of a story with no options so not a game in my book :( I'll take even meaningless choices over no choices...

Hint - press and hold Space to get to the end

A nice story. I'm just going to tell you now but I gave you 5 stars on the audio category because it was awesome. A story and not a game but good job.

Suffers from the same problems my entry did :P I love the visuals and the audio is fantastic, though. And your story idea had potential, I really liked it.

So, I played the updated version... the opportunity to walk into literal invisible walls does not a choice make! I'm fully willing to admit that I may just be too stupid to get the plotline--a guy who loves VNs tries to avoid VN cliches to find his perfect girl, then gets stuck in a maze that he doesn't actually have to navigate, and then meets her in a platformer, kisses her, and realizes that he's ascended to godhood and ended a war? It just seems kind of incoherent, which is why I assume I must not have understood...

Hey, another RenPy user !

The story was a bit confusing. I think you could have used more visual assets or "clearer" ones (like some stock images) because I didn't really understand what I was looking at and it didn't quite match the mood in my opinion.

Not completely unrelated but I'm kinda sad hearing people claim that visual novel aren't games =/.

No interactivity, but I see you did what you were able to do yourself. Nice story and nice hustle. Good luck in the future.

Nice story! I included it in part 28 of my Ludum Dare 30 compilation video series, if you’d like to take a look :) http://youtu.be/Hmt93jxkWGQ