Black Bile, Inhuman Circuits by RobotParking

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made by RobotParking for LD29 (JAM)
A very(!) short Twine game that lives beneath the surface of the body, in the realm of bodily humors: black bile, yellow bile, phlegm, and blood. Would love to have made this longer, but only had a few hours to work with over the weekend.

CW: Loud noises, BILE MAGIC

Ratings

Coolness 97% 2
Overall(Jam) 2.58 666
Audio(Jam) 2.50 554
Fun(Jam) 2.39 634
Graphics(Jam) 1.81 754
Humor(Jam) 3.05 198
Innovation(Jam) 2.62 553
Mood(Jam) 2.81 517
Theme(Jam) 2.34 672

Feedback

Zarkith
29. Apr 2014 · 05:05 UTC
Where's the link to play it? :/
🎤 RobotParking
29. Apr 2014 · 10:15 UTC
Aha! Missed the http at the start. Should work now.
cudabear
29. Apr 2014 · 14:26 UTC
This was... interesting. You got a few chuckles out of me, but for the most part your writing was pretty disgusting, which is more of a complement than an insult, based on the subject matter. The music in the middle seemed really out of place, but it was nice to hear something more than silence for a bit. Pretty short for a text game, would have liked to see more branching paths.
Cake&Code
29. Apr 2014 · 14:27 UTC
I was slightly confused by the juxtaposition of outdoor landscapes and internal organs/fluids but it was nevertheless fun to play through the scenarios. Just enough wit to make it entertaining but not so much that it became overbearing.

I also didn't know there would be loud music but when it came on I had to chuckle a little :)
João Kucera
29. Apr 2014 · 16:41 UTC
Congrats!
Figglewatts
29. Apr 2014 · 16:42 UTC
This was certainly interesting.
Snoother
29. Apr 2014 · 16:54 UTC
Enjoyed the IF references and fourth-wall breaking. Pretty damn funny at times. Oh, and really well-written; some of the imagery is just horrifically sublime. An inventive use of theme too.
Snoother
29. Apr 2014 · 19:40 UTC
And, of course, it definitely has the best title of the comp.
IAmSpencer
29. Apr 2014 · 20:56 UTC
made me laugh, liked the concept. Good job :)
🎤 RobotParking
30. Apr 2014 · 01:07 UTC
Well gosh everybody {♥_♥;}
mcapraro
30. Apr 2014 · 04:29 UTC
nice writing
arrogant.gamer
30. Apr 2014 · 16:56 UTC
What a weird experience. I'm not sure that I knew what I was doing, but I got all the humours and used the pentagram. Fake Gamer!
blockbot
01. May 2014 · 17:01 UTC
Pretty funny story.
AmmoreChicks
02. May 2014 · 09:48 UTC
You are crazy! Ah, ah!
ThingoStudios
03. May 2014 · 20:47 UTC
The background color shifting with your respective choice of humor was a really good integration of mechanics into gameplay, and the imagery was delightfully disgusting. The inexplicable rock music that started blaring whenever you unleashed the yellow bile made me laugh too.

I guess if I have a complaint it's that the more referential humor contrasts with the rest of the game. Haha, you find a pentagram because adventure game logic. Haha, it's a neckbeard who says "misandry" a couple times. They felt like cheap gags at the expense of the overall vibe of the game. Not problematic enough to be a serious detractor from (imo) the creepiest game of the jam.
BMacIntosh
08. May 2014 · 17:38 UTC
"Ok cool"
kristof
15. May 2014 · 23:00 UTC
I do not really know what to make of it. But it was definitely interesting :)
ElStevo
16. May 2014 · 00:24 UTC
Cool twist of the theme! Pretty much everything has been said.
Raiyumi
16. May 2014 · 07:15 UTC
This was.. interesting. It certainly surprised me when the sound kicked in. It's got a bit of humor with the gruesome text. I liked it. :)
PaperBlurt
16. May 2014 · 17:30 UTC
Once again you come through!
Colours, fonts and narrative in a cataclysmic experience.

Never stop writing!
PaperBlurt
16. May 2014 · 17:31 UTC
Also, you play with words and create the eeriest of eerie moods.
Franklins Ghost
18. May 2014 · 06:29 UTC
Nice writing and liked the use of music.
Lucariatias
19. May 2014 · 17:14 UTC
Absolutely hilarious and fantastic placing of music. Well written and enjoyable to play.
Ever considered writing a full novel?