really nice!

Interesting but awful colour scheme that hurt my eyes. Couldn't get very far so not sure how well it fit with the theme. Good to see something that's not your typical game.

Thanks!

i played this while hungry.

welp.

The colours aren't awful they are beautiful.

Oh dear, these color choices are difficult to read text

Didn't really understand the game...

what am i playing?
awesome/5

I have no idea what's going on with this game.

I dig it.

It took me a few minutes to kind of get into the swing of your writing style - it's sharp and abrasive and hyper. Pretty awesome.

what a strange world you've created. i really had no idea what was happening in the beginning but as i continued playing i got into the whole atmosphere your writing has. the colours are distracting, and that fits very well with the rest of the game.

I...

Interesting idea. My eyes hurts a little bit (cause of colors), but I can handle it ;)

Ah confused! :)

Haha that's awesome, but the colours, ouch D:

That...was... WEIRD. Yet awesome. Yet weird. Yet awesome.

I don't know what-
It's just that-
What is this I don't even-

Everything about this is wrong... but in such a right way. The colours are awful... but are a perfect choice for this piece of poetry.

Your writing is immense. Once you push through the first impressions it really, really grips you something fierce.

Omg, that hurt my eyes but, in a strikingly sensible way. Like, the story could only be displayed with painful colors. It was like I was seeing things. If the game was in other colors, I don't think I would have felt as weird out of it. Nice!

Nice but, why that pink color ? XD

Some lines were kinda funny, but like others had said, I have no idea whats going on.

That colors hurt my eyes. Interesting idea, I laughed ^^.

Thanks for the kind words, everyone!

That pink meant I could only last about five minutes. Nice writing though!

Interesting :)

Well that was . . .

Hurt my eyes with the colours. Confused how this fits with the theme

Yeah, the colors made this lose some points, for me. Interessing, anyway.

Some really good writing, and I like the color scheme a lot, don't listen to them :P

Why the bright pink, why?

This thing is genius on a literary level... screw video game jam this is progressive fiction (is that a thing? it ought to be) jam... color scheme is brilliant, story is brilliant, interpretation of the theme (Time? What does time have to do with 10 seconds?) is... brilliant.

I'm in love.

i'm a huge advocate and admirer of both piss and filth. great twine game.

chrisamaphone: That's fucking nothing. I was eating while I went into this thing.

It's awful. RobotParking: YOU'RE awful. I kinda like it.

Creative text adventure!! Nice use of the hyperlinks :)

I'm so confused... I don't even know where to start. Very... creative? It's lost on me though...

Nice idea, I love text adventure :)
But yeah, the colors hurt the eyes :D

Like an unholy mash-up of Burroughs and Jeff Noon, I really enjoyed reading this. The colour scheme lingers in the retina though... :)

Ow my eyes. the color was a bit much. interesting approach though.

I enjoyed it though. Keep up the good work!

Any deeper meaning is lost on me, but it was a blast to play.

Not my cup of tea. And boy that hot pink did a number on my eyes.

Interesting but a bit too extreme in some cases.

I have no idea what I played through, but it was AWESOME! XD
I didn't like the background color, it kinda burned my eyes.

One of the more interesting and different entries in this LD. :D

As a non-native English speaker, I sometimes struggled with some words, and couldn't exactly see how much the theme was involved in this. But that was nonetheless fun to read.

My eyes.

Interesting interpretation of '10 seconds' and an even more interesting story!

Yo RobotParking. Your game feels like somebody just barged into my house, threw up on my floor and I LIKED IT. Word.

I definitely see Porpentine influence there.


@madk: Your comment made me laugh.

THANKS FOR PLAYING/COMMENTING. COULD KISS YOU ALL ON THE DANG MOUTH.

Nice change of paced compared to most entries I've been playing. Colors were kind of blinding. Nice work!

Great entry, and really good idea, but...the color burnt my eyes.

Background is terrible. =|

I like pink too.

Wow so much purple :)

Amazing. Videogames often lack intelligent discourse, grindcore and pink backgrounds, thank you for providing all three of them.

So i see different colors now. Also my brain does not compute. Is this an absurdest movement in games? I don't quite understand, but i respect.

Very different, and in your face ,much like the pink color!

I was ROLLING. Nicely done hahahaha.

Very, very Porpentinesque, this, almost enough so as to be a parody. (I have no idea whether I would have believed it was made by her if I hadn't seen the author's name.) Cool subversion of the theme, very good writing (again, if you like Porpentine's style), and very good Twine work. I always like to see Twine games that pose a bit of a challenge, and this one did.

I could have lived without the more disgusting bits, but that's a taste thing (oh gods, Chris, don't think about "taste" in this context) and not related to the quality of your work. Very well written and coded.

Also, grammar nitpick: "put pay to" should be "put paid to".

Interesting. I also didn't really like the bright colored background, it was a little distracting.

Pink background and white text? OMG, MY EYES!
Another problem with that is that there are so many slang-like expression.. Since English is not my native language, i ended with the translator opened in another tab to understand what's going on.. And the crazy and confusing storyline didn't help at all. Sorry to be so negative, this was my experience.
Oh, but a storygame kind of game is very original, that's a positive fact!

Ehhh not too much gameplay in it

A Twine adventure! Awesome!
<3 Porpentine (I admit, I was very dismissive of interactive fiction until I read Propentine)

I love how coarse this is and how it forces you to be such an offensive character. Well written and a unique experience.

The pink was a bit hurty after a while, and when I looked away everything looked green *o*
but it fit well with the abusiveness of the game itself.

Good length and sweet interpretation of the theme!

Eh, my eyes hurt now, the white background looks kinda blue...
Cute game, one of the more enjoyable twine games I played. Thing is, twine games tend to tell a story , and the coices you make during that story are generally irrelevant for it's outcome. Once we find a way to fix this, it's perfect! ;)

Auuuuug guugh guugh 5/5

interesting game, but would've liked a different color scheme.

This hurts my brain. Fuchsia!

Interesting story, but the background colour is too bright.

EXTRAORDINARY! this was like Vogon story mixed with alot of sweet Gore-Grind passages that are certainly scourging one's brain enought with a pink/viollet ribbon.. uh.:x the game was awesome, really!

+1 for the title/interpretation of the theme :)

Wow.

I'm not sure what just happened. I'm not sure whether I liked it or not. I don't think I'll be going back for seconds this time around.

But this was good. Thank you.

That was disturbing, but also fantastic in it's own warped way. I couldn't finish it though... too full. ;-) Seriously though, I just ended up going round in a loop not knowing which way to go. I think my brain was too frazzled from it.