The Fromagist by ABPositive03

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made by ABPositive03 for LD24 (COMPO)
Seriously... I pulled this off?


EDIT: Now that I've slept a bit, I can comment a bit more...


Really this was meant to be an exercise in plot writing to see how well I could do in that regard. I knew due to my lack of time (over half the 48 hours were accounted before due to prior engagements... oops!) text-adventurey type thing was pretty much my only route to an entry.

Twine is pretty awesome, if you're into this sort of thing. I found it very easy to add in variables and whatnot, although unfortunately there's no "else if" type of scripting in there - something that made implementing the endings an exercise in "Screw it - just list 'em all!"

With some more tweaking to twine, and addition of some sort of inventory and combat mechanics (beyond simple variable storage) I could see it really being the best way to make online Zork-like games.


Next game I'd love to do one with actual graphics. I had designs of doing little silly doodles to add along with all the passages but time cut me short on that front.

This was really fun to make, and hope to have a much better entry next time around. This is silly, and barely touches on evolution (that theme really threw me for a loop) but it's here and it's done. I have a game I can literally say I made, even if it's simple and only takes a few minutes to play. :)

-ABP03

p.s. if anyone knows where I can put the actual twine file for my source, let me know. I think technically I'm violating Compo rules but couldn't find a proper host in time.

Ratings

Coolness 56% 3
Overall 3.19 249
Fun 3.04 239
Graphics 1.83 715
Humor 4.00 9
Innovation 2.74 420
Mood 3.54 57
Theme 2.62 476

Feedback

mes
29. Aug 2012 路 03:38 UTC
This game is hilarious! I saw the title fromagist and instantly wanted to check out your cheese game. Wait, wasn't the theme evolution?

I guess you've got bacteria and stuff, which is related to evolution.. and you have to try different combos which is artificial (unnatural?) selection in a way.

Anyway, this was hilarious to read and click through. There are a lot of really funny lines and twists contrary to what I expected.

Good work.
Wydra
29. Aug 2012 路 16:49 UTC
Great text adventure! Its very funny.

As for the source, shouldn't you be able to put it up on a github repo?
馃帳 ABPositive03
29. Aug 2012 路 18:51 UTC
Well... I guess I could put the RTF up there on github, or the HTML source - but I was thinking the Twine file is the proper source, and that's not really anything but a Twine-openable project file.

Unless I'm mistaken - I just want to keep right by the rules of the compo :)
馃帳 ABPositive03
29. Aug 2012 路 18:51 UTC
Also, thank you both for the kind words! :)
zatyka
30. Aug 2012 路 01:08 UTC
I enjoyed this quite a bit. Your implementation made it feel like a more "modern day" text adventure.
tdsmale
30. Aug 2012 路 22:34 UTC
Text Adventures always get a thumbs up from me!
PaulSB
30. Aug 2012 路 22:42 UTC
Amusing and certainly bizarre little text adventure! A large suspension of disbelief required to get into this cheesey world. Cool :)
cacciatc
30. Aug 2012 路 22:47 UTC
This was great. I stand by my choice of Beaver milk!
Starmen
31. Aug 2012 路 00:15 UTC
That's.. not.. what I expected to happen. (Ending SkO). Great work though, really nice little adventure and also presented really well.

Not sure if it's down your alley, but you might want to look into Inform 7. It's a text adventure engine that a friend told me about recently and, based on this, you might enjoy using it. It seems really powerful and has an "else if" style thing, I think.
馃帳 ABPositive03
31. Aug 2012 路 12:30 UTC
Thank you! I'll have to look into Inform 7 - I remember as a teen mucking about with the Frotz engine but never really got around to making anything with it.

Really, I'd like to do something with real graphics and sound and whatnot next LD... I was just really bad with my scheduling this time around.

Thanks to everyone who commented and liked my little adventure. It's not much but at least something got in :)
tumoxep
31. Aug 2012 路 19:19 UTC
I made zombie apocalypse. Awesome!
Sgt Squirrelly
01. Sep 2012 路 00:29 UTC
I enjoyed the game (and I typically am not into text adventures!). Very funny, and I love that you put all the endings on the last page, even though that probably wouldn't be good practice in a normal game. Not sure I see the "Evolution" connection, though.
hgcummings
01. Sep 2012 路 22:45 UTC
Nice. Tenuous link to the theme, but this was really fun and quite unique.
Rabbits...
02. Sep 2012 路 03:35 UTC
Wow, I caused a zombie Apocalypse, made a cheeze fighting leauge and created a unicorn, great job, very captivating...
Josh @ Dreamland
02. Sep 2012 路 04:26 UTC
I got one of the beaver endings. I appreciated the unicorn and zombie endings. ;)
Cake&Code
04. Sep 2012 路 01:48 UTC
That was so much fun! I've never played such a ridiculous text-adventure before and laughed quite so much. Sorry humans, I mixed up quite the noxious and deadly Toxxie. No hard feelings eh?
Raptor85
07. Sep 2012 路 11:15 UTC
the game links dont work, they time out while loading
JonathanG
07. Sep 2012 路 12:17 UTC
Both links point to the same place (http://pastehtml.com/view/c9kauorev.html) and neither of them work
Sestren
07. Sep 2012 路 21:59 UTC
This is a perfectly cromulent game. :P I made The Toxic Avenger on my first run though, it seems, at vat "SeS" of all places.
馃帳 ABPositive03
08. Sep 2012 路 14:34 UTC
Sorry Raptor85 and JonathanG, looks like pasteHTML went down for a bit there, but it's back up now.

I'm going to have to get my own website/blog space soon as I'm back on the java programming kick. Fromagist will get a new home when that happens.
davidwparker
14. Sep 2012 路 15:06 UTC
Funny text adventure (choose your own adventure!)