@limbo The link does not work :cry:

@cpokered now it should be ok. (I forgot to publish draft on itch.io)

I couldn't find a way to avoid the errors, so was unable to progress. But the promo art and concept are nice :)

Every choice results in a Renpy error

Game should work now. I don't know if it is right with Ludum Dare rules, but I've changed game version to the earlier on itch.io.

It works now! I really like the idea. An ambient music would have fit good!

Hey guys, I would like to work on this further. So two things: please critique it till your heart is contented, and please tell me where I could share the finished work? Somewhere where I could "exchange comments for comments", would be good.

The idea is fine but there is a lot of bugs and minor writing mistakes which shouldn't show up in a text-based game. The game could use a bit of minimalistic UI design (some nice buttons design for example)to make it look less rough. The story I experienced was nice overall :thumbsup:

//Właściwie to też dodałbym, że pozdrawiam z Polski, masz ładne grafiki na artstation//

Nice plan, got caught by your pictaure and was eaten by silver wofl)
Looks good for visual novel but it missing some background. And looks like mouse wheel can change dialogs(I cant understand what it exacly do)

I really enjoy this type of games, imagination is the best type of graphic engine. It got me invested in the story really fast.

One thing i would really love is the option to disable auto-skipping. Some times it won't skip and it makes you press Enter key to skip manually, and after a while you get used pressing Enter. Some lines skip really fast tho, resulting in double skip when you press Enter and there is no way to go back and read what you've skipped.

There's also was a bunch of error messages in there, some are red "EOL while scanning string literal (<none>, line 1)" the other one was


All in all - pretty nice game, good job!