I Am The Real Dahlia Verry by shreemp

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made by shreemp for Ludum Dare 53 (EXTRA)

(WIP) Mystery VN about a group of friends in a forest.

'Home' for fullscreen toggle, 'Enter' or click to advance text, click on choices

  • v0.1 public jam release (72 hrs)

  • v0.1.1 tweak to demo (white automatically fades in when loaded, placeholder speech bubbles replaced with real art)

Ratings

Given 17🗳️ 28🗨️

Feedback

Kristian Kurktchiev
02. May 2023 · 02:43 UTC
looking forward to when it's done, the art looks good and the title is promising, my type of game!
GreatCadet
02. May 2023 · 02:48 UTC
I absolutely love the art! The style and mood of this game definitely has potential!
BigTex
02. May 2023 · 02:49 UTC
not much hear at the moment. great start though
NuiN
02. May 2023 · 08:08 UTC
I like how the environment slides in in different parts
LDJam user 262142
02. May 2023 · 08:11 UTC
@nuin that's very sweet lmao i know it's like saying the loading screen is pretty with the state its at right now but i appreciate it <3
Aalula
02. May 2023 · 08:23 UTC
i like the background art a ton
MKRaw
02. May 2023 · 11:20 UTC
well that was short lol
recyx
02. May 2023 · 14:30 UTC
Wow the art and animations are great! Looking forward to what this will turn out to be in the end :)
Jampla Games
02. May 2023 · 20:50 UTC
Nice start! But I was not sure the game was loaded with just the all white. Clicking seems intuitive enough to check if it loaded. But maybe just a little anything to indicate the game loaded. Like if this is the character seeing stars from the fall, just be all white with a few sparkles. Or maybe a timer so if no click it moves to open scene after a few seconds. Or a transparent layer of the forest on white? Just a thought, could run with all white. Just how it felt to me. Dope art, and I like the animations and choice mechanic.
Papabirb
02. May 2023 · 23:31 UTC
@jampla-games Yeah, I agree about the white screen, I had a misunderstanding during development and we've been discussing how to handle it - your suggestions sound like pretty good solutions! Thanks for trying out our game! :smile_cat:
LDJam user 202408
03. May 2023 · 16:13 UTC
"damn this game is taking too long to load.."

"oh man it must be quite a heavy game.."

"man it's been 5 minutes already.."

*pressed mouse button* -> screen fades

"oh my god I'm such an idiot!"

lol, I wish this has more to it, it has a good potential
Obe Dot
03. May 2023 · 16:16 UTC
Graphics look great!
limered
03. May 2023 · 16:20 UTC
I like the mood very mutch. Looking forward to the full release.
Local Minimum
04. May 2023 · 16:40 UTC
I must say, I'm a little confused, just to be sure I didn't miss anything. The game ends right as you stand up and view the forest? And it says the demo is over?

The art style was nice, the interactions clear. I didn't hear any music or sounds either, but perhaps that was a missed opt-out?
Papabirb
04. May 2023 · 21:54 UTC
@local-minimum Yes, that's correct. It's a work in progress - we weren't able to finish by Jam but we're still working on it as Extra. But we wanted to be able to play and rate everyone's games, so we had to publish an early first version to Extra since you have to publish before you can rate.

There's no sound at the moment so that is a bit of a missed opt-out, but sound is planned later & it's not like Extra games show you anything but "n/a" when scores drop anyway at this time. I'll go ahead and opt out of sound for the time being, though.
LDJam user 261418
05. May 2023 · 14:45 UTC
The atmosphere is quite something and really like the art-style you were going for!
Keep at it and see where you can go with the idea :D
Mia_143
05. May 2023 · 14:45 UTC
The background art looks nice and the start promising! Hope to see it evolve :)
ardorugus
05. May 2023 · 18:41 UTC
Fun trees' appearance. Nice char cap there. Loved the choices! Some music would be cool, even for this amount of gameplay. Continue!
Wouter52
05. May 2023 · 19:56 UTC
Oh, I was expecting more ^^" I see that it is work in progress, so I'll come back later :-) I can't rate everything. Sound is missing, and right now the game is not really fun I think (because the story is not done yet). I'll rate for graphics though, those look very awesome!

Edit: I see that shreemp and papabirb are working together! That is cool! :sunglasses:
LDJam user 334002
06. May 2023 · 20:49 UTC
The game is still in WIP, but i think that this could be a good game if you continue it and add stuff like a boss fight.
LDJam user 262142
12. May 2023 · 17:28 UTC
@nature-pixels boss fight? in this economy?!
F1Krazy
18. May 2023 · 17:19 UTC
Wow, this really is short. I'm guessing most of the development time went into the game engine and artwork, because it looks very slick and polished. It's just a shame that it ends before it even really gets going. I hope to see this get finished someday!
LDJam user 371030
20. May 2023 · 15:44 UTC
Pretty cool start! The beginning reminds me of Cube Escape series / Rusty Lake : ))
There is a similar slightly spooky vibe here. Great artwork! I wanted to see more, quickly, ones I started.

Starts very intriguing, it's hooky! Keep up the work!

A few things I noticed:
- note that serif fonts are a bit hard to read, my eyes were straining a bit / maaybe sans-serif is a better choice when there is a lot of text
- there is no way to skip text - I accidentally went out of the game / and wanted to move to the point I was, unfortunately this was not possible;
- some of those typing sounds can be a bit harsh on ears / maybe something slightly more subtle would be better :)

Overall, awesome effort, **love** going over screens with this artwork.