deliver me from X by konfekt

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made by konfekt for Ludum Dare 53 (JAM)

a story of escape

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//CW: features somewhat graphic descriptions of childbirth

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post-jam notes: you can read my postmortem write-up here

Ratings

Overall 883th 3.297⭐ 39🧑‍⚖️
Fun 1181th 2.473⭐ 39🧑‍⚖️
Innovation 567th 3.365⭐ 39🧑‍⚖️
Theme 625th 3.892⭐ 39🧑‍⚖️
Graphics 579th 3.703⭐ 39🧑‍⚖️
Audio 469th 3.389⭐ 38🧑‍⚖️
Humor 1060th 1.607⭐ 16🧑‍⚖️
Mood 113th 4.162⭐ 39🧑‍⚖️
Given 40🗳️ 63🗨️

Feedback

JoshuaBounds
02. May 2023 · 01:15 UTC
That was actually incredible. I was on my seat the entire way through. Well done!
LDJam user 338234
02. May 2023 · 01:38 UTC
I'm incredibly happy that you liked it, thank you so much!
Wadlo
02. May 2023 · 23:22 UTC
The "Hello World" xD. Nice game you've got here. I'm especially liking the hand-drawn graphics and the story is really good.
Str8griz
02. May 2023 · 23:28 UTC
The atmosphere of the game was great! The style, story telling and music really blended together nicely. I also enjoyed the Hello World attribute.

The one destruction song did some weird things to my ears but I think small tweak on that is all it needed.

Great job!
Freakman
02. May 2023 · 23:28 UTC
very unnerving and engaging, liked the atmosphere and art! reminds me of bag of milk inside a bag of milk a bit. good job.
LDJam user 338234
02. May 2023 · 23:57 UTC
bag of milk was definitely an inspiration, thank you!
Hoshinu
03. May 2023 · 22:53 UTC
Whoa. All I can say is, whoa. That was intense, and really well-written. Excellent work!
LDJam user 307494
03. May 2023 · 22:55 UTC
Very impressive writing! It pulled me in. The atmospheric sounds were top-notch too!
k8n
03. May 2023 · 23:04 UTC
Super cool visuals and sound!
theguy
03. May 2023 · 23:12 UTC
very impressive. that was a journey I was not prepared for.
nice job!
LDJam user 202408
04. May 2023 · 18:34 UTC
that's an easy 5/5 innovation from me, I love the story telling aspect of video games so when I realized that this was a story focused game I was hooked, I'm still not sure exactly what I witnessed but it was a wild ride lol and the art style was pretty fitting! though I wish there was more to it from a gameplay perspective, I'm not sure how much my choices affected the game but it seems that's the only sense of control I had, other than that this is a great game and I love the uniqueness of it in a jam full of driving and pizza games!
LDJam user 338234
04. May 2023 · 19:13 UTC
Thanks for the feedback, I'll definitely try to implement more choices/choices that affect the gameplay in the future, sadly I was pressed for time so the decisions at the beginning really only affect one or two lines of dialogue.
Kler
05. May 2023 · 22:58 UTC
That was a slap in the face, and I mean that in the best way. Super original entry, was not expecting such a grim atmosphere but I loved it.

I would have liked for the text to generally appear maybe twice as fast, with maybe a few selected lines going slower for emphasis. As it is now I had a tendency to click to accelerate text appearance (which I'm very thankful you implemented) because I kept catching up to it early.

Great use of writing/graphics/audio on their own and as a cohesive whole. Congrats!
Shane Gadsby
09. May 2023 · 11:33 UTC
Absolutely fantastic audio work! The heartbeat-y sound sent shivers down my neck!
ardorugus
10. May 2023 · 03:59 UTC
It's... educational). As if lived through.
amango
10. May 2023 · 21:59 UTC
The mood of this game was really unique! Poetic experience. I'd suggest a simple arrow/continue button on screens that introduced just pictures alone; I wasn't sure if I was supposed to wait, or if I should click to proceed.
PabloAbraham
10. May 2023 · 23:32 UTC
Wow, what a ride! I was completely immersed in the intense story and the atmospheric audio really elevated the experience - especially that unnerving heartbeat sound. The hand-drawn art style was an impressive touch and really complemented the narrative. It did feel like the game was more of a journey than an interactive experience though, I would have loved a bit more control or influence over the events. Also, the text seemed to appear a tad slow, maybe it could be sped up a touch? Regardless, this game was a breath of fresh air in the midst of all the typical jam entries. The grim atmosphere was unexpected but absolutely captivating. Great job!
Nastasya
15. May 2023 · 07:40 UTC
Interesting! Good job
Stevie257
15. May 2023 · 20:52 UTC
The visual effects in this game are well-executed, adding excitement and spectacle to the gameplay moments and creating a visually dynamic experience
Sodoj
15. May 2023 · 22:39 UTC
Wow, you took everything magical out of the miracle of birth and left only the most unsettling things, making for a gripping and unnerving story that had me glued to the screen. I loved this one, the only thing that sort of broke the immersion is the very very loud music at that one part, I wish there was a way to adjust audio before the game began. Great job!
aile
17. May 2023 · 16:19 UTC
Unique take on both the theme and the chosen topic. I was wondering about the narrator, as I think it changes throughout the story.. so my question is who is the person/voice speaking at the beginning. I also liked how there is a sort of uncertainty as to how fast or slow the time is flowing, because it feels like some of the dialogue/thoughts/events could literally take place within seconds, but then it slows down. There is a feeling of a "limbo" of sorts hanging over the story, which I think is something many parents can identify with.

The graphics and music work well together, as mentioned by others the music in chapter 2 (from "but what of me, then?") was a little too loud at some point and it was too dominating so it didn't quite achieve a strong effect. The rest of the audio was nice though.

I have two kids, so it is always cool to see how other people interpret and think about this topic. Thanks for this original and nice LD entry!! :)
LDJam user 338234
17. May 2023 · 21:29 UTC
@aile Thank you for your detailed comment! If I decide to make some fixes to the game the audio is going to be a top priority as I've received a lot of comments on that.
Regarding the characters, I think of it as two opposing forces and one human, but as I left it all very ambiguous it's entirely up to the player to interpret as they see fit.
interpixel
18. May 2023 · 11:17 UTC
nice writing, dark and poetic. more of a short story than a game since there were no decision to make or actions to take but enjoyable in it's own unique way