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made by riley9 for Ludum Dare 50 (JAM)

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This was the first time I participated by a jam and the first time i made a game! <3 a story about being queer in a capitalistic world. a story about escaping a convenience store. where you can only trust the employees. a story about yellow. about its past, present and future.

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try to find an exit or the store will close down and you will be forever alone. play with the arrow keys on your keyboard. it is highly recommended to interact with all the objects and people that are highlighted!

KNOWN ISSUES:

  • it can be confusing sometimes, where to go next!

MINOR FIXES:

  • i changed the window size of the game on itch.io

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Ratings

Overall 564th 3.613⭐ 33🧑‍⚖️
Fun 1035th 3.048⭐ 33🧑‍⚖️
Innovation 909th 3.081⭐ 33🧑‍⚖️
Theme 1141th 3.183⭐ 32🧑‍⚖️
Graphics 655th 3.688⭐ 34🧑‍⚖️
Audio 619th 3.29⭐ 33🧑‍⚖️
Humor 215th 3.845⭐ 31🧑‍⚖️
Mood 210th 3.984⭐ 34🧑‍⚖️
Given 43🗳️ 41🗨️

Feedback

Anaxie Studio
05. Apr 2022 · 13:02 UTC
I clicked for the interesting graphics and limited color palettes and stayed for the cute, funny dialogues! I also liked the cool transitions between scenes and the use of color to show interactables. The addition of darker/deeper themes makes for interesting contrast. Pretty cool, especially considering this is your first game ever :open_mouth:
Poppy Entertainment
05. Apr 2022 · 13:09 UTC
the gen z humor in this game was wonderfull, i din't manage to find the exit but it was really nice
LDJam user 285972
05. Apr 2022 · 13:49 UTC
It's such a nice game! Thank you for creating it.
LDJam user 237261
05. Apr 2022 · 13:56 UTC
There's some pretty heavy stuff in here - it works really well how you approach your experiences and combine them with your sense of humor! Lovely game!
Jones
05. Apr 2022 · 20:38 UTC
I found the exit! The pun at the end was pretty good, to me some of the dialogue was a bit too much tell not show, but that's just me. I really enjoyed the music and felt it set the theme well. I wish there had been a way to show if something had new dialogue if I talked to it again cause I found myself not doing that just so i didn't get stuck in the talking loop again. I think on your itch the window size might be wrong as I had to change to fullscreen to see everything, but that again might just be me.
kristinamay
05. Apr 2022 · 20:39 UTC
Congrats on your first game ever! I really liked playing this and wandering around interacting with everything/everyone. This is soooo creative, keep making games!
CobGoblin
05. Apr 2022 · 20:42 UTC
I loved this <3 As a trans person I found this super touching and deeply relatable, I hope you keep making games! Plant book is my favorite character
colineobordello
05. Apr 2022 · 20:50 UTC
creative and funny. I really like the graphics. Good Job!
Mopifish
05. Apr 2022 · 20:59 UTC
I too am just a little catboy who likes to wear hair clips...
Good game <3
I ended up getting stuck in this room though:![Capture.PNG](///raw/2fe/54/z/4cd90.png)

I couldn't see myself on the screen, and after button mashing for a while I ended up accidentally talking to a parking garage robot!

Overall love the trans color palette and themes :)
EpiglottalAxolotl
05. Apr 2022 · 21:10 UTC
This was a great atmospheric story-focused game. The music is a bit repetitive, and it wasn't always clear where screen transitions were, but everything else was great!
jhandsy
05. Apr 2022 · 23:04 UTC
Really cute and relatable! I loved it. The music was nice and chill, and the art was super cute <3 Good job!
FireSlash
06. Apr 2022 · 03:57 UTC
I found it a bit hard to follow the dialogue comfortably with the tiny little two line box. Often the speaker would switch between the two lines and break continuity in my brain between who was speaking.

Got stuck in the same spot as mopifish.

Otherwise always happy to see more narrative games in LD!
Heloise
06. Apr 2022 · 10:06 UTC
I clicked for the colors and graphics, I stayed for the theme ( a story of how capitalism tries to destroy you, and how to try to avoid it, what more can you ask for?) Really cool game! Great job :heart:
🎤 riley9
06. Apr 2022 · 11:05 UTC
thanks for the kind feedback of you all! <3 <3
I changed the window size on itch. thanks for the tip @jones i guess that was why some players couldn't find the exit. @mopifish @fireslash
i also share the critcism in regards of the text layout and dialogue window. i think i'll tidy it up post Ludum Dare.
Corrupt Spaghetti
06. Apr 2022 · 11:54 UTC
This game is really relatable. The conversations with green were especially heartbreaking. I also liked the Tokyo Ghoul references!

For things that could be improved, maybe the text box could be a line or 2 bigger. That way the player wouldn't have to push buttons to advance the text as often.
SwordMage
06. Apr 2022 · 12:10 UTC
I liked this a lot. solid writing is a rare treat in games and being funny at it is like magic to me.
LDJam user 279546
06. Apr 2022 · 12:47 UTC
Great writing and the background track provided some great atmosphere.
zantze
06. Apr 2022 · 20:19 UTC
aa I want to see the game in higher fidelity!! the writing was so expressive and fun to read. Good and interesting take on the theme!!
Wuppos
08. Apr 2022 · 01:20 UTC
This was great and very different from all the other games I played from the jam. The story was very confusing (which was good), but in the end I did feel like I got the message (or a message at least). the game felt like playing through someones dream, where they were dreaming about their life and about the things they hate about it :)

I think it went a little bit long for the kind of game it is. I was really interested in seeing all the little interactions I could find, but after some time it became a bit much of similar things. Once I came near the ending, with the horse in the room etc, the story really changed however, and it became a lot more interesting again. The music was a perfect fit, because it felt a bit creepy as well. Really well done with that!

Overall I loved the experience! Great job :D
RIBOUT Horace
09. Apr 2022 · 18:04 UTC
The pitch sold me the game from the start. I'm exactly the kind of public for this kind of game, it really is weird and quirky but in an interessing way, and the limitation of the medium really just help convey the overall theme and message! It was great and lovely despite the """depressing""" tone!
🎤 riley9
10. Apr 2022 · 17:36 UTC
i finally have some time to answer your comments ^-^

@cobgoblin thank you so much!! this means a lot <33

@corrupt-spaghetti yes i plan a 1.1 post ludum dare version that has an extended text box! (and yay another tokyo ghoul fan!)

@swordmage thank you! yes, before i really started making the game, i was banking on the story and dialogues, glad to see it paid off!

@jzucc12 thank you too :> music is still something i have to look into more broadly. i'm glad that this little tune reached some of you <3

@zantze haha yes me too!! i'm looking into PICO-8 right now for my next game! if i can get along with it, a bright future awaits us :D

@wuppos thank you for your long comment! i agree i could have streamlined the game a bit more! i generally tend to make my project a bit too long because i always fear that they are too short haha. i'm glad you were captivated by the story and the music <3

@ribout-horace thanks! it's nice to see that the melancholic theme and the quirkiness go well together :>
satacat
19. Apr 2022 · 00:59 UTC
it's almost 4 am here and you totally made my night, not gonna lie. at first i was captivated by the cute art style, but then when i saw a "story about being queer in a capitalistic world", i literally gasped cause of excitement. because for me, as a trans person, these little silly games with their little silly stories about little silly queer people are SO important, so you've done a great job at least for this reason. found impressive the dialogue features, especially when somebody used our deadname or the correct pronouns. very good entry, thank you so much for sharing this project and showing representation :) <3
🎤 riley9
20. Apr 2022 · 04:56 UTC
@satacat thank you sp much <33 that means a lot!!