Akoban by KoB-Kirito

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made by KoB-Kirito for Ludum Dare 53 (JAM)

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Is there anyone who doesn't enjoy shopping and hanging out with friends? What matters is getting out and enjoying your free time, whether it's clothes or new games! There are no clouds in the sky and the sun is shining. But what is it?

Slowly, a queasy feeling spreads throughout your body. The feeling doesn't get any better when your cell phone rings. There is a strange noise near you, and your best friend is calling. Everything changes in an instant and you find yourself panting on the streets.

What happened? It's up to you to find out!!

Ratings

Overall 577th 3.583⭐ 32🧑‍⚖️
Fun 901th 3.069⭐ 31🧑‍⚖️
Innovation 934th 2.931⭐ 31🧑‍⚖️
Theme 414th 4.083⭐ 32🧑‍⚖️
Graphics 287th 4.133⭐ 32🧑‍⚖️
Audio 107th 4.086⭐ 31🧑‍⚖️
Humor 422th 3.37⭐ 29🧑‍⚖️
Mood 347th 3.804⭐ 30🧑‍⚖️
Given 35🗳️ 41🗨️

Feedback

Blueanoli
02. May 2023 · 08:03 UTC
Sehr angenehme Musik <3 Ich liebs! Art style ist mega nice. Mein erster Gedanke, als die beste Freundin aufgeploppt ist: "BUSEN!" XDD
Syriella
02. May 2023 · 18:04 UTC
I love the character designs and the overall aesthetic/presentation in general, very nice!
Arluci
02. May 2023 · 19:56 UTC
I LOVE IT!!!! The artwork is incredibly cute and the story is so well written....and the music OMG!!!!!!

The only thing I could critic about this is that it's a lot to read..I personally have no problem with games where you have to actually read the story but I bet that many other people will complain about this detail.

But all in all I think it's a great game you guys published!<3
cawfee_art
02. May 2023 · 20:05 UTC
this is so wholesome <3 love the story and art!!
Endocrine_BAMSc
03. May 2023 · 07:17 UTC
Very cute and a surprising amount of content. Well done! You might want to change the title, though? I think in the game he is called Boris Akuban and the title is Akoban. Not sure if I'm not getting an in-joke here, but maybe that is a mistake :)
I am especially in love with all the scene backgrounds - the style is quite amazing. Keep at it!
SpicyMarcus
03. May 2023 · 12:41 UTC
Such a wholesome game, very cute and great art!
🎤 KoB-Kirito
03. May 2023 · 13:07 UTC
@endocrine-bamsc Thank you for the feedback! The neighbor of the main character is called Akoban and he thinks it is for her. The idea was that the package got delivered wrong because of the similar name and we chose that title so we don't give it away immediately, but I guess that detail got lost a bit :D This ist the first draft of the end-screen: ![image.png](///raw/ee2/75/z/5b062.png)
Endocrine_BAMSc
03. May 2023 · 13:18 UTC
@kob-kirito Ooooh that makes sense. I played it way too late at night, so I probably didn't get that.
🎤 KoB-Kirito
03. May 2023 · 19:48 UTC
We fixed some bugs!
- Fixed performance issues with sounds and music
(Also reduced game size by removing unused assets which should improve performance a lot)
- Fixed some sounds in dialogs not playing
- Fixed bartender showing twice
- Fixed bartender name color
- Fixed character names showing too early
- Fixed bar intro text showing twice
- Fixed final scene music volume
- Fixed girl not leaving the scene
- Fixed different ending not showing (buy the car)
- Fixed several typos
- Removed default player name to avoid accidently using it
- Changed the packet search to be less confusing
LDJam user 250825
03. May 2023 · 23:58 UTC
Very cute game, had fun following the story! (is that a Monokuma plushie btw? :D)
Cookiezz
04. May 2023 · 05:35 UTC
Cute game with a cute story! The music was wonderful and fit the theme perfectly. Vibrant art with interesting characters :)
Vladadamm
04. May 2023 · 07:16 UTC
I've succesfully delivered Monokuma to the little girl, the party is saved (or maybe I've just doomed it ?).

Artwork is nice, I like the backgrounds a lot, a bit less fan of the character design/style though it's personal preferences.
The story was quite wholesome with a little bit of humor.

One thing I've found that I think would have been nice is to have some background noise sfx while searching for the package as the narration tells us we're searching for the source of a noise yet that noise is missing breaking immersion a bit. It would also have been nice to have a bit more interactive elements as there's only some in the first area (with the trash can, mailbox & gate).

Overall, a cute short narrative game.
LDJam user 278146
04. May 2023 · 16:42 UTC
Very vibrant character design and lovely music.
LDJam user 242787
05. May 2023 · 03:32 UTC
I loved playing this game! The art style was stunning and the music was a standout feature. The well-written story had a wholesome and humorous tone that kept me engaged throughout. Great job to the developers!
Zhiteng Chen
05. May 2023 · 10:57 UTC
Nice aesthetic and narrative! Good luck and welcome to play my game as well.
aile
05. May 2023 · 18:32 UTC
Congrats on making a wonderful narrative game! I really liked playing through it and thought the plot was decent. The music was a nice addition, but I do agree that you could have made for example the "source of a noise" an actual noise audio clip. This way all the elements would really serve the story. The art had different styles, and made me curious how the game would have looked like if art direction had followed the character style ^^

As a writer, I mostly prefer to use shorter text and less exposition. There's a value in trusting the player/reader to connect the dots themselves. They often will, and it creates a nice experience for them because they feel that they "figured it out" themselves. (And sometimes you also want to leave certain things vague, so that it is up to the reader what they will make of it). Just my two cents. Well done with the game, great team effort!
sansen
06. May 2023 · 12:31 UTC
Great music and character design, and a warm story!
DurkaGames
08. May 2023 · 21:27 UTC
Cute characters and lovely music!
peterfiftyfour
09. May 2023 · 11:00 UTC
Cool art style! particularly love the wavy flower like pupils in the eyes!
fuzzybut
09. May 2023 · 22:53 UTC
Beautiful music, and the story is sweet! I played the game a couple of times to check out the different dialogue options, went to the bar too early, etc. I liked the player name input - nice touch! Overall, it seems like a polished short story game.
soundgnome
15. May 2023 · 03:02 UTC
Great art style, music, and general vibe. Also well done making sure the game has an actual ending, easy to run out of time during game jams!