Really compelling, played it all the way through. Great writing - some really nice image systems in there, warmth cropped up a lot, really helped to build a mood. Will make a note to play through this a few more times to see the other endings! :)

Great to see a twine game! Funny idea for a narrative, this poor guy..

Wow, that was pretty interesting. Great little game overall!

I like the setting, not that often you see that in a game.

Excellent writing. Really enjoyed this.

If only I had been there 10 seconds earlier...

This was fun. Pretty much the perfect game to play at work. I love all the repetitive elements (music, "10 seconds", series of short events, etc.) with the bureaucrat theme.

That music is lovely.

I was impressed by the length of the text. Some branches were surprisingly different which is nice. The technical implementation is pretty good and clicking around is very quick and easy. A lot easier than the paper stories where you have to always search the right page and paragraph. The funky music didn't irritate and was easy to listen to while reading. Didn't really expect to see this kind of game here but it's neat that you made one! :) The visual descriptions probably count as graphics btw. :D

I knew that it had to be a trap those tempting offers! But I fell on it anyway... this had a great balance in presentation and narrative, it was really funny to see how you applied the theme.

the music and writing really fits the theme. it's not often you see these jonah twine games either, and this was very well done.

You must be a writter!

Thank you everyone for your feedback. :)

I love text adventure, so I found this a delight to play.

Felt like there were some nods 1984 and Fight Club. Amusing writing, quirky music.
Really cool!

interesting game, I liked how decisions seemed to perpetuate through the rest of the story

Finally, not a story about love. I liked it, found it sort of bleak though... I featured it in my Ludum Dare compilation series, if you'd like to take a look :) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O6xfnRK2Anw

This was a nice story ;) Furthermore a nice way to implement a text adventure.

Nicely made (and with appropriate music!), and pretty immersive, even if the place where it immersed me wasn't one where I particularly wanted to be. That said, being depressing was probably the point. It will stick with me for quite some time.

The theme felt shoehorned in. The writing is very minimalistic, and it became a bit dull to read after a while, but some lines were very well written.