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Poetry by metalchouchen

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made by metalchouchen for LD34 (JAM)
So this is my entry for this Ludum Dare. My goal this weekend was to follow a tutorial to create a spline editor in Unity3D. But finally, tonight after the work I decide to make something that looks like a game. Mostly to be able to vote and comments other games :)

I'm note sure it's a game. But at least it's zen and relaxing.

Thanks you for playing.

(PS : Once I'll reinstall completely unity3d 5.3, I will made the WebGL build.)
Windows http://metalchouchen.itch.io/poetry
Original URL https://ludumdare.com/compo/ludum-dare-34/?action=preview&uid=37446

Ratings

Coolness 46% 1507
Overall(Jam) 3.13 692
Fun(Jam) 2.59 921
Innovation(Jam) 3.41 314
Mood(Jam) 3.61 218
Theme(Jam) 3.43 726

Feedback

tyrants.not.found.team
15. Dec 2015 · 13:07 UTC
The mood created is awesome :)
I would have liked to hear a recording of the poetry, since reading it was a bit hard.
Good job!

Cheers,
Morco (tyrants.not.found team)
yhsper
15. Dec 2015 · 13:17 UTC
I liked the aesthetics you used in the game, particularly the Skybox use and the music. I liked the rail controls, although I'm not the best at them, but found the poetry writing impossible to read while playing. To me, not zen and relaxing at all! Fun, nonetheless!
RougeRogue
15. Dec 2015 · 16:13 UTC
Definitely shows a lot of potential as a game (that is if you plan to turn it to one; it works just fine as it is).
LxStudio
16. Dec 2015 · 08:49 UTC
I imagine this would be an exquisite way to end a story (e.g. outro or credits sequence). Beautiful experience.
coywolf
16. Dec 2015 · 12:42 UTC
Cool concept. I also had trouble reading while playing
CremaGames
16. Dec 2015 · 13:04 UTC
I like the mood and the aesthetics but I got all dizzy
utgarda
16. Dec 2015 · 13:06 UTC
I was able to kinda read it because I remember some narrator reading it, so it sounded in my head :) With more challenge added it's going to be a great game. For now, the coolest thing is seeing this 3D path all over the space. The idea of collecting words for the poem, or maybe "pieces of thought" or inspiration, this brings 5 stars for innovation from me.
fractalbear
16. Dec 2015 · 22:38 UTC
Awesome concept! Loved that instead of score you collected words of a poem, great idea! Visuals were really nice and the music was lovely, great stuff :)
🎤 metalchouchen
16. Dec 2015 · 23:41 UTC
Thanks you all for your comments :) That give me a lots of motivation to make it better.
Rex Peppers
18. Dec 2015 · 13:03 UTC
Can't play on windows, but looks cool!
Rialgar
20. Dec 2015 · 22:09 UTC
While poem and game did no seem to connect, I liked both. Music was interestingly fitting both the visual stlye and the poem. Good job!

Reading while playing was difficult, maybe stretching out the collectibles or having a narrator read a piece the poem everytime a verse/sentence/unit is complete would get rid of that.
Hot Box Games
22. Dec 2015 · 20:52 UTC
I liked the visuals and the idea, the poetry is rather hard to read. But lovely games.
beetracks
22. Dec 2015 · 21:03 UTC
Interesting mood, interesting idea, but it was hard to read and play. I'd put a sfx when the balls are caught too.
SinclairStrange
02. Jan 2016 · 22:57 UTC
Had trouble reading a little however the whole premise was nice and relaxing. Great mood!